Matt Bellamy

Hmm. I do like the theme of this poem; that throughout you are describing everything that is wrong, and then the last line that turns it around. However, just by ...

Just gonna go through this line by line: Where will you go, When it gets too much to bear? And I will try to meet you there.

I liked the similes you used, but it seemed a little...unfinished. I was waiting for one more line, to rhyme with your last one, to just kind of round it ...

Welcome to YWS :) I'd like to point out that we use a 2:1 ratio here; that is, for every piece of work you post, you need to critique two ...

I love the first stanza, and how you make references to nature in describing all the eyes you have seen. I also like how you separated the speech into its ...

I really like the tone of this piece, it just...sounds so good, you know? Your description is excellent, as well. Though I think I liked it better before I read ...

I quite like this style, it sounds a little...old, it's nice. I also like how you used repetition - "passed away, forever away", and "lain on the grass, lain on ...

This was all tell and no show, and loses all structure halfway through - the last five lines seem more like prose than an actual poem. Find an original way ...

It is a good start, but I need to know more - as it stands, this poem gives me nothing to relate to. Who are you talking to, why do ...

I like the repetition of inhaling and exhaling, and how at the end you seem to have gone to...well, what I would call your happy place. Also, "chastise my mind ...

Firstly, I'd like to welcome you to the site. Secondly, I'd like to let you know that we have a 2:1 ratio rule here - so that you critique two ...

Need it be said again? This is excellent. You describe everything so beautifully, your use of imagery is great - watercolour sunset, tasting colours on your fingertips...Also, I like the ...

I really like the first stanza, especially how you put links on a separate line. The last line of that stanza is great, too. I think you use good rhyming ...

I think the letter kind of format was a good idea, however aside from that, your poem seems to have no structure at all, and I know poems don't have ...

Let's jump straight in. The first two lines don't rhyme, and neither do the last two, so they're not in keeping with the rest of the poem. I like the ...